Storyboard

Project- 'School run' storyboard by Dan Payne

Audience Feedback on pitch

Feedback 1

I feel that the pitch is very basic, and quite boring as they are just sitting on a chair reading the script of their phone which isn't very professional in my opinion. It doesn't really show the creative side of the creators and I feel that they could of put a lot more effort in the way they present the pitch. However, it does give a detailed explanation of the film so I understand what the basic narrative of the film is now. It seems extremely rushed and could be of a much better quality and this does put me off watching the film as I worry if they are rushing the script that they may rush the trailer. 

Feedback 2

I enjoyed the storyline of the script and I would definitely watch it, but the way that it was put across in the pitch could've been a lot better. I didn't like the fact that they use read the script off their films which makes me wonder whether they have really thought about their script and how they are going to produce a high quality film. It seems as though they just wanted to get it out of the way and start work on other things rather than spend time on creating their pitch which could affect their chances of gaining a bigger audience. 

Feedback 3

The pitch seems very rushed. It seems as though it was planned for a very short amount of time due to them reading it off of their phones. It doesn't show much enthusiasm in the story, which is the opposite of what I expected, and it has put me off watching it as I don't believe that with their enthusiasm they have shown in their pitch to produce a high quality film. I may consider watching it if my friends tell me that the film is very good but I wouldn't count on it. 

Pitch video

Audience Feedback on production logos

Audience Feedback 1 
Out of all the production logo's, I like the first one the most as it is simple and effective. It works well as the letters SM are in a big and bold font awn so stands out and then the pictures in a smaller font. The star also works really well as it is the same size as the word pictures and makes the whole logo look a lot crisper. The other logo's are good as well however the last logo I feel like there is too much going on and so that wouldn't work well as a production logo.

Audience Feedback 2 
I think all the production logos have good features about them but they can all be improved as well. My favourite logo out of all of them would be the second one as I like the idea of the logo being of a circular shape. I do however think to font should be changed of the word pictures as it is too bland and a more exciting font would make it look better.

Audience Feedback 3
My favourite logo is the last logo as I like the fact that the letter 'o' are film reels which gives the logo a real creative edge. The 3D effect of the word motion works well as it makes the logo stand out. I also like the first logo with the star and the font used for SM makes the font stand out. The third logo also appeals to me with the lines in between the logo and the star but I don't like to font used in the third logo.

Pitch for film

The film we are producing is called School run. Te genre of the film is an action film as it involves all the conventions which an action film will have such as shooting and fight scenes which will be involved in the film. The film is about three kidnappers attempting to kidnap Laura Gill who is the daughter of Bill Gill the ex prime minister. The school goes into lockdown with the kidnappers and other school students locked in the building. Three school children Elliott, David and Jason with the help of the EX SAS must save the hostages and the school before its too late. The majority of the film will be filmed in the school building with the rooms such as the common room and the drama room used. Other locations that will be used will be a teachers car that will be used as transport for the kidnappers to get to the school. A range of shots will be filmed of the kidnappers inside and around the car. The film will feature 11 main characters with extras possibly being added as well. The cast are all school students apart from the ex SAS who is a deputy head at the school. The trailer will feature a number of shots as different shots will make the trailer a more professional standard.

Film production logos

Location, Costume, Prop list

Location list


Plantsbrook school- The majority of the trailer will be filmed in Plantsbrook School. This is because the film is based in a school so the shots need to show the main location of the film. There will be many different rooms used including the sixth form common room, senior management office, the drama room, the dining room and also classrooms. The outside of school will be filmed also such as the entrance of the school. The drama room will be used where the hostages will be kept by the kidnappers and also when the video is filmed which is sent to the manager who sacked the kidnappers fathers. The senior management office is where the ex SAS officer will be filmed for the majority of the film. The sixth form common room is where the heroes will be located in the film but they will be shown in many different locations around the school.

Red Mercedes C class 2010- The car will be used for the kidnappers travelling to the school. The kidnappers will be driven to the school and many shots will show the kidnappers inside the car and also running out the car. Extreme close up shots of the car will be shown in the trailer.


Costume list

School uniform- The students will be in school uniform as the film is set in a school on a 'normal' day.
Black suit- The kidnappers will be dressed in black suits as they like to look smart. The ex SAS will also be wearing a suit,.
Balaclavas- Balaclavas will be worn by the kidnappers to hide their identity.


Props

Black gloves- These will be worn by the kidnappers to prevent any finger prints being shown.

Plastic guns- At least three black guns which are going to be pistols which the kidnappers and the ex SAS will use.

Laptop

Phone

Car

Camera